Comments and Evaluation for N450: Leadership & Management Paper (WAC)
- You need to work on writing conventions: grammar, punctuation, & spelling
- Work on clarity – be sure your audience can completely understand and follow your writing
- Use precise and appropriate word choice
- Use a scholarly and professional tone
- Do not:
- use anthropomorphisms
- use contractions
- begin sentences with conjunctions
- Be sure each body paragraph has a clear main point, which directly supports the thesis statement
- You need to provide more source material.
- You rely too heavily on your source material. Source material is supposed to be used to better explain a complicated issue, point, etc., provide an example, or support your ideas, points, analysis, etc.
- 4-5 pages in length not including the title page and references page (you must meet the minimum requirement of 4 pages)
- Minimum of 4 scholarly sources: sources must be recent (within 5 years); older sources must be approved by instructor
- APA
- Your in-text parenthetical citations are not properly formatted
- You MUST use signal phrases before the start of paraphrased source material and a parenthetical citation at the end of it, to indicate where it begins and where it ends
- Your reference entries are not properly formatted
- Your “References” page is not properly formatted
- Write more concisely
- Introduction
- Provide a clear, strong, and accurate thesis statement (no lists)
- Provide enough information to prepare your audience to read your paper
- Introduce the overarching concept of the paper
- Do not discuss the scenario
- Nurse Leadership & BSN Education
- Explain more thoroughly what nursing leadership entails
- Provide more examples of ways in which nurses are leaders
- Explain more thoroughly the importance of effective leadership choices and actions in nursing
- Explain more thoroughly the benefits, for nurse leaders, of a BSN education
- Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion
- Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the benefits of being BSN prepared
- Description of Scenario
- Introduce the scenario
- Clearly connect the scenario to the overall purpose of the paper (without directly mentioning your paper)
- Describe the scenario more concisely
- Describe the scenario more thoroughly
- Describe the scenario more objectively
- Plan & Rationale
- More thoroughly describe what you plan to do and the intended resolution
- More thoroughly describe your rationale
- Explain your rationale for the leadership choices and plan of action. This needs to include some knowledge, concepts, and/or skills you learned in your chosen non-clinical nursing and general education courses.
- Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion
- Provide more relevant and/or credible support for your rationale
- More effectively defend your choice of leadership style(s)
- More thoroughly compare and contrast your chosen style to another possible style
- More thoroughly and effectively argue why your choice would be the most effective for the scenario and why
- Provide more relevant and/or credible support for your chosen style
- Implementation of Plan
- Describe more thoroughly how you would implement your plan
- Explain more thoroughly the specific steps you would take
- More clearly identify how the steps you are staking reflect your chosen leadership style(s)
- Describe more thoroughly the knowledge, concepts, and/or skills from your non-clinical nursing and general education courses you plan to use in the execution of your plan
- Explain more thoroughly why and how you will use the described knowledge, concepts, and/or skills from your non-clinical nursing and general education courses in the execution of your plan
- Include both a non-clinical nursing course and a general education course in your discussion
- Provide more relevant and/or credible support for how you will implement your plan
- Awareness & Use of Effective Leadership & Management Choices
- Explain more thoroughly the need for nurses to be aware of their leadership and management style choices
- Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the need for nurses to be aware of their leadership and management style choices
- Explain more thoroughly the need for nurses to employ the most effective leadership and management style choices for any given situation (this includes changing styles for different situations)
- Provide more relevant and/or credible support for the need for nurses to employ the most effective leadership and management style choices for any given situation
- Explain the need and benefit for the constant awareness and use of effective leadership and management styles and choices. Use scholarly source material for support.
- Conclusion
- Provide final commentary regarding the benefits of effective leadership and management choices
- Summarize the importance of nurses being aware of and making effective leadership and management choices
- Provide a synopsis of the importance of a BSN education for nurse leaders and the importance of effective leadership choices
Additional comments:
TOTAL GRADE:
| CATEGORY | 5 | 4 | 3 | 2 | 1 |
| Sentence Fluency & Writing Conventions 5% | Demonstrates skillful sentence fluency (varies length, good flow rhythm, and varied structure) AND Exhibits reasonable control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling. | Demonstrates reasonable sentence fluency AND Exhibits reasonable control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling. | Demonstrates minimal sentence fluency AND/OR Exhibits minimal control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling. | Sentence fluency is lacking AND Exhibits minimal control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling. | Sentence fluency is so poor it hinders comprehension AND/OR Lacks control of grammatical conventions appropriate to the writing task: sentence formation; standard usage including agreement, tense, and case; and mechanics including use of capitalization, punctuation, and spelling. |
| Vocabulary 5% | Exhibits skillful use of vocabulary that is precise and purposeful. | Exhibits reasonable use of vocabulary that is precise and purposeful. | Exhibits minimal use of vocabulary that is precise and purposeful. | Lacks use of vocabulary that is precise and purposeful. | Use of vocabulary is so poor it hinders comprehension. |
| Organization 5% | Organizational structure establishes relationship between/among ideas/events. | Organizational structure establishes relationships between ideas/events, although minor lapses may be present. | Organizational structure establishes some relationship between/among some of the ideas/events. The structure is minimally complete. | Organizational structure does not establish connection between/among ideas/events. The overall structure is incomplete or confusing. | No organizational structure. |
| Focus 5% | Topic/subject is perfectly clear throughout the paper, and each body paragraph has a single, clear focus. | Topic/subject is generally clear throughout the paper, and each body paragraph has a focus. | Topic/subject may be vague throughout the paper, and some body paragraphs have a focus. | Topic/subject is unclear or confusing through parts of the paper, and few body paragraphs have a focus. | Topic/subject is unclear or confusing in the paper, and each body paragraph does not have a focus. |
| CATEGORY | 5 | 4 | 3 | 2 | 1 |
| Elaboration 10% | Elaboration consists of specific, developed details. | Elaboration consists of some specific details. | Elaboration consists of general and/or undeveloped details, which may be presented in a list-like fashion. | Elaboration is sparse; almost no details. | No elaboration or details. |
| Support 10% | Support information is related to and supportive of the topic/subject. | Support information has minor weaknesses in relatedness to and/or support of the topic/subject. | Support information has major weaknesses in relatedness to and/or support of the topic/subject. | An attempt has been made to add support information, but it was unrelated or confusing. | No attempt has been made to add support. |
| Specific Requirements 50% | All specific requirements of the assignment thoroughly and accurately completed at an exceptional level. | All specific requirements of the assignment thoroughly completed at an above average level. | All specific requirements of the assignment completed at a basic and minimal level. | Some of the specific requirements of the assignment completed. | Few to none of the specific requirements of the assignment completed. |
| Documentation & Format: APA 10% *Source material not documented is plagiarism and will result in zero points for the composition. | All sources documented and cited correctly with no errors in either the in-text citations or on the reference page, and APA format is correct with no errors. | All sources documented and cited with minimal and/or minor errors in the in-text citations and/or on the reference page, and/or APA format is correct with minor errors. | All sources documented and cited with some errors in the in-text citations and/or on the reference page, and/or APA format is correct with some errors. | All sources documented and cited with many and/or major errors in the in-text citations and/or on the reference page, and/or APA format is correct with many or major errors. | Little to no attempt to document or cite sources properly, and/or little to no attempt to use correct APA format. |
| TOTAL %
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